10 thoughts on “A Night in Manhattan by Rival’s Rapture

  1. goliadmike says:

    Fuck that was great. The story hit a lot of kinks for me. I just knew Hope was going to drown the bitch…glad you pulled it back.

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    1. Rival's Rapture says:

      I’m so glad you liked it! It was a story I began more than a year ago, so it’s certainly taken the long path to being written. What kinks in particular did it nail? If you don’t mind sharing.

      Also, I would absolutely write a fatal fight, but I’d need the emotions to be a little heavier than in this one. Yes, they were competing, jealous, and angry. But, not to the point I’d need them.

      That being said, I have been trying to let the punishment and humiliation aspects of some of my stories go further. It’s been something people have mentioned they want for a long while.

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  2. hankmccoy02 says:

    Excellent story. I really enjoyed this one. The perfect balance between sexy and competitive. Not to mention inventive and humorous – the failed attempt at fellatio was very well written and stood out for me personally. I chuckled as I read it! It was the perfect way to eject Brandon from the scene, once he had outlived his usefulness to the plot.

    Having to maintain the pretence of indulging the drunken jock with “girl-on-girl” action, while actively seeking to sabotage their ill-fated threesome was a unique dynamic in this genre (or at least it was in my humble experience).

    My tastes trend towards the more erotic end of the spectrum in this fetish, and this story really hit the bullseye for me.

    Great work. Already looking forward to reading the next one!

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    1. Rival's Rapture says:

      Thank you so much, Hank! The story had been such a long time coming, and had been so many different things/styles in my head, at different stages, that I was terrified it would come out a garbled mess.

      And though even I feel that I avoided that, somehow…. I did want to mention to you, that more than a few people who read the story before its release told me it was very HankMcCoy’ish — which(!) I take as a compliment.

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    2. DrewPowell says:

      Hank, it’s wonderful you call Rivals’ work humorous, these stories have that advantage 😉 I can’t be funny if my life depended on it.

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  3. apenman says:

    It would appear that the ultimate college coeds fighting for the hunky school jock tale has been written. Each story of yours is like reading a long, free verse poem. Great work, as always!

    A.P.

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    1. Rival's Rapture says:

      Thank you so much, A.Penman! I wrestled with this story for so long, it was almost entirely impossible for me to know if I was creating utter garbage or something worth the time it took for someone to read it, but hearing you enjoyed it gives me some solace. <3

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